KD - wonderful, descriptive language, enjoying the write, using the boards to get sentences right. First person, he did need help getting into present tense.
NS: surface features, full stops, capitals none were used until the end, and used incorrectlty. Spelling but dyslexic tendencies.
D.O'P Needs help with adding detail and descriptive language - more on adding adjective etc to a noun.
AP - needs to keep with present tense.
E.C - Great language, cannot focus and not writing enough in the time I would expect a Year 5 to write. NS: Mileage, speed.
MD - tense
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